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And when we're in a middle of a fight,
your lips come crashing down on mine.

Those are the things I miss.
I'm aware it's short.
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Kira73 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
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:heart: KM
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:O!! Thankyou :3
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Kira73 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Very welcome. :)
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
^_^
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99percentdevil Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes short is great
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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Evairy Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2010
wow. that's just the type of piece to hit you right in the middle of where everything hurts so much. beautiful.
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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steppingskyward Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
QUIT PULLIN MAI HEARTSTRINGS IT FUCKIN HURTS.

...:+fav:
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
hah? sowwy?
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steppingskyward Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
yes it was supposed to make you kinda-ish laugh on the inside :iconimblushingplz:
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Heh well i did sorta xD but i wasnt sure if i had upset you so thats also serious ^_^
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steppingskyward Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
oh.....sorry!!
i make it more obvious next time ^.^
(i just try make happies!)
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ i be happy :3

x n_n
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hatsumimae Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Student General Artist
its short and sweet! really! i love it ^_^
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ thankyou :)
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hatsumimae Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Student General Artist
your welcome!
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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hatsumimae Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2010  Student General Artist
^_^
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ravencourt Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010
I like it. I like the way it starts with and, a lot. A think maybe the second line could be reworded a bit. Something about it doesn't settle entirely right. It sounds almost a bit cliche. Try to make every word mean something.
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Savedbylight07 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010
Very passionate!! Superb!!
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babycloudVVings Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010
i think it takes a whole lot of skill to write a beautiful, short poem! =)
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou :)
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Aeluxia Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010
Very beautiful, so few words to get such a deep meaning across! :)
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Lightfoot138 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Student General Artist
It made me smile and go awwwww:heart:
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
hah :3 yay :hug:
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EternalSlurp Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this made me smile :)
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ that's cool, i wasntt sure what people would get out of it n_n
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Whitefire806 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010
Sometimes the shortness, gets the point across better, love it <3
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou :D!
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Whitefire806 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2010
also, easily to connect to C: and you're welcome!
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
^_^
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uramoniH Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love it!
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ yay!
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katievanblah Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010
I think its shortness makes it more poignant.


I like it a lot :)
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HayleighElizabeth Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ thankyou
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